October Girl

oooh nice very nice I like it, especially the title it fits the story perfectly.

This is so sick and twisted that I love it (: good job and from my expertese it is poetry

I like it, so far it's good. Keep me posted -Max

um darling I don't mean to be rude but what the hell?

whoa Pol this was so freaking awesome!!! It sent chills down my spine, I agree with the user above me, coolio names love ya your friend as always -Max

whoa, this was like.... deep.... I love it, bravo :) it was depressing but not boring whoa.... good job -Max

oooh nice very nice after this post I want to be your bff lol, I like this I can't wait for more!!!

I like this, but no offence I fail to see your point in the matter, what's the emotion? What's the story behind it? How did it happen? Why should I ...

I agree with the user above me, it looks like a paragragh, when you make it longer PM me and I'll review it again, until then, good luck.

Hello again, I promised when you wrote more and edited that I'd crit it again. I think you went into more detail, whihc is a good thing no one wants ...

this is a completely useless crit but I really liked it!! -Max

This was actually very good, but I'm not going to go over what I liked, because it seems like everyone else has already done that *pats on the back* nice ...

Well then..... I liked it :)

welcome new member!!! lol I dunno why I said that. Anyways it's short so there's nothing really to crit about it. But ah I guess it's understandable kinda?

the 1st harry potter book >.< I was sooo going to need therapy after that.